Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers and to J Hardy Carroll for the photo.
The Uprising
She is alone on the hill.
The other women stand apart.
Her misfortune is so great, they are afraid to be near her.
She has lost everyone in the uprising: husband, three sons, and now her only daughter-in-law, taken prisoner in the final protest.
Aye, probably dead now too – or wishes she was.
The woman is empty, hollowed out, yet heavy with grief.
But she has no time for self-pity.
She turns away from the scar of the internment camp.
There is a child waiting at home.
She is all he has now.
And because of him she will live.
So much said in so few words, life can be very cruel,
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Thank you, Michael. Yes, life can hurt.
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Ouch.
Powerful piece, Jenne, tragedy with a glimmer of hope.
And it’s the hope that kills…
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This tight format of 100 words is a great teacher.
I’m glad to be learning from it.
Thanks for always encouraging.
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Stark and powerful. Very well done, Jenne.
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Thank you so much, Sandra. Your comment is much appreciated.
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Dear Jenne,
Powerful piece, Full of emotion. Brava!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle. And for running this challenge. It’s teaching me that sometimes a lot of words are not needed.
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Loved “Her misfortune is so great, they are afraid to be near her.”
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Thank you very much, Neil.
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So painful. Beautifully done.
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Thanks, Mason.
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My heart hurts for her. There is a glimmer of hope with her grandchild (I assume, that is what he is…)
Beautifully told.
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Yes, it’s her grandchild, Dale. Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
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A poignant piece indeed Jenne, well done.
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Thank you so much, Keith.
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Well done. Cold, bereft, but determined to stay alive for her child. Women are amazing.
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Thank you so much, Linda
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“And so it goes…” (Kurt Vonnegut) It’s a wonder that any of us get through it alive. Oh right, we don’t. Excellent storytelling, Jenne. About the women afraid to be near her, such an intimate detail that really brings your story to life.
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Thank you so much, Lisa. You’re always so encouraging. Much appreciated.
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You’re very welcome and I appreciate your writing.
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I read this at 5am this morning, it took me to Auswitcz. To the aftermath of the Jacobite rebellion and then to a night in Greenock when many Italian businesses were ransacked and the men interred. All from a short piece of dynamic prose.
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Maybe because we never seem to learn, Phil, it’s an eternal story. Thank you very much for such an understanding comment.
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Sad there is so much conflict. Everyone needs something to live for. The grandchild is her saviour.
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Thank you so much, Tannille.
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Time to take a step back – there is someone who depends on her. Great story!
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Let’s hope they don’t take that child too, or she will give up.
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Yes, Liz, without the child she would have no hope or consolation left. Thank you so much.
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Thank you so much, Draliman.
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A hopefully future awaits her. Powerful piece of writing.
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A powerfully moving piece, Jenne. I like the glimmer of hope at the end.
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Thank you very much.
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Wow. Powerful writing. I’m not sure the child is so much a figure of hope as the seed of a future uprising…
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That’s a good point, Penny. I hadn’t thought of that, but yes, let’s hope so. Thank you!
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Such can be the harsh realities of life. A very hard-hitting take!
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Thank you so much, Shweta.
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You’re welcome 😀
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This is so sad. Lovely writing.
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Thank you so much.
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Perfectly written. So many losses and they still go on. It makes you wonder how people still can maintain the courage to rise up against their oppressors. And we see it every day, all over the world, if we care to look.
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Thank you so much, GHL. That’s the thought I was aiming for by not setting the wee story at any point or in any place in history. It’s sadly a story for all time.
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I can’t say that cheered me up. But it is very well done.
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Sorry it was so grim, Bill. It was a grim kind of day! But thanks very much for reading and commenting despite that.
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Oh, gosh. Sharp take of breath for that one, Jenne. Really good, really moving and suddenly too close to home.
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