The Long Ride Home

© C. E. Ayr

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In no more than 250 words write a story inspired by The Long Ride Home.

The Long Ride Home

I love my dad, he’s my hero.
I want to be just like him.
He loves me too, tells me I’m special.
I was so happy when he said we were going on a journey together, just him and me and a couple of servants.
We loaded up the donkey with everything we needed and walked along beside it.

Dad always says his job is to protect me, so I don’t understand what happened today.
Every time I close my eyes, I see it: I’m tied to an altar, and my Dad has a knife in his hand.
I’m screaming and he’s crying and telling me God wants him to do this and he trusts God and I must trust him too.
The knife comes down…
But, at the last minute, stops.
Dad says he hears God’s voice telling him to sacrifice a ram instead.
Then he hugs me and sits me on the donkey, which is usually a special treat, but it doesn’t feel like that today.
I don’t hug him back.
He says one day I will understand, but every time I close my eyes I see his hand and the knife coming down towards me.
All the way home I see it.
My Mum is standing at the door, weeping.
When she sees us, she cries out, ‘Isaac, my son,’ and grabs me in a proper hug.

I don’t think I want to be like my Dad after all.
And secretly I wonder about God too.


  1. I have to confess, Jenne, that I always detested Abraham because of this story, your retelling of which is quite superb and doesn’t make me like him any better!
    Scathing indictment of big Abe’s boss, which would have gone down like a lead balloon in a previous Challenge!
    I think you deserve a chapeau for this excellent piece.

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    • I’m happy the story worked for you.
      Thank you for your always supportive comment.
      I’m not over-keen on Abraham myself.
      And glad to have a forum where this kind of story is not met with ‘righteous’ indignation. 😉


  2. I think Isaac would grow up a much wiser man than his foolish father.
    The lesson in your story calls out for modern-day sheeple everywhere to listen up and use the good sense they were born with.

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